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Responses may include the following points:
T
ext One
• conveys her positivity from the start: ‘in fact, many young people are
transforming their world’
• uses examples of real young people who have made a difference: ‘Grac
e
Min
er’
• offers positive advice: ‘the key is to help them’, ‘Actively seek’,
‘demonstrating to them that they have something valuable to say’
• gives examples of helpful approaches: ‘Offering them small decisions’,
‘Why not, for example, have the class choose a cause’, ‘Bring in world
events’
• the use of a supportive / reassuring tone: ‘It is true that young people
need rules’
• the use of sub-headings
• the use of questions.
General points candidates may make on the whole of Text One
• it is advisory
• the use of a slightly informal tone
• the writer’s positivity
• it is aimed at teachers.
Te
xt Two
• starts with a description of Ellie Jones: ‘awarded’, ‘passionate’
• refers to the negative views of society: ‘destructive’, ‘don’t contribute
anything positive’, ‘don’t care’
• contrasts this with the positive: ‘do really positive things’, ‘act as
responsible citizens’, ‘want to be taking responsibility’
• the references to the ‘barriers’ to participation show she is sympathetic to
young people
• she is very positive about the Diana Award: ‘really about making sure’,
‘really about challenging the perception’, ‘shining a spotlight’
• she emphasises the qualities required to be involved: ‘persevere’, ‘hav
e
courage’, ‘keep striving’
• ends on an encouraging comment: ’So have courage.’
G
eneral points candidates may make on the whole of Text Two
• it is mostly a speech / first person
• it directly addresses the audience
• it is informal
• it has a friendly / supportive tone
• it includes her personal experiences / beliefs (use of ‘I’).